Any comments or ideas on my presentation, plz ! ( Topic:How to manage conflicts and express feelings

nếu không phiền thì bạn " tống cổ " cái slide sang le_xuan_nguyen@yahoo.co.uk cho mình ngắm nghía học hỏi có đuợc không cảm ơn nhiều nhiều
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Được britneybritney sửa chữa / chuyển vào 16:39 ngày 03/11/2003

got a chance read through the paper, finally. Interesting! In tongue of structure, one more time it proved the differences in communication between western and oriental cultures. While many people in the U.S. and Europe would go directly to the point they want to express, people in Asia like walking around on a spiral path leading to the target. Before showing audiences how to manage conflict of feelings, kat_kat leads audiences a tour quite long. It''s no right or wrong, or good or bad issues, it''s culture. It''s favorable in this culture, but may be less in the other. In directive speaking (western culture), some people would make the tour shorter and can consider it as a part of introduction. The  then jump to target, and bla.bla.bla... 

mcgrawhill has online learning resource on Internet. I have looked at it for 2 times, I guess. But I don''''''''t remember content contained there (because I only read the book Organizational Behavior). If you guys want, I will post the web-site next time.
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Được britneybritney sửa chữa / chuyển vào 23:17 ngày 02/11/2003

Wat is the time bac online so i can send it as transfering file to u???
To txnghia: strong agree với bác, bài này cua kat_kat hơi lòng vòng. MIne was short and sharp. Đi thẳng luôn vào definition the content and giving out eg, then recommendation. That''''s it.
Được britneybritney sửa chữa / chuyển vào 23:13 ngày 02/11/2003

it''s not just long but too long for a 10-min presentation...as I said ,this essay can be done by more than 1 time ( 1 time=10mins)...indeed,the intro part leads me to a lesson of moral...and bingo!!!...the whole essay is really good lesson which teaches you how to behave well....I think ,the "western style" should be strongly applied
to: nothernlights :bac kat125 nhan la neu bac online gio nao thi bac noi ro la gio cua UK hay la gio o dau dau do nha,de bac y con mai phuc ma chuyen bi kip ,cam nang cho bac

Kat_kat: I think for a written assignment, this is a nice article. However, for an oral presentation, you should also prepare some slides (like those in PowerPoint). Each slide should last for about 1/2-1 minute (so a 10-minute presentation would consist of about 15-20 slides). This way you can time yourself better, and the slides can serve as a visual aid, which is always required in any presentation situation.
By the way, where are you studying, Kat_kat? The reason I am asking is because I''m really impressed with your english. I cannot imagine you''re studying in VN with this kind of english. (Or, perhaps, my imagination needs to be updated.
--Pippin

yeah it must have been better if we could make our presentation in the labs sothat we could use ppt slides as visual aids but too bad, the labs r not available for all english classes at my skool. So i just prepared the outline, boards n charts in large sized papers n performed it in the normal classroom, not too bad thou.
eh yeah am studyin at a vietnamese uni. actually in my assignment i used my own words n borrowed the language of the conference books as well, call it a combination, and once we can link ideas n paragraphs, our writing will run smooth in a flow, i think.
and u can see loads of ppl in here who r not studyin overseas at all but write very beautiful english, they sound very close to native, i can learn n immitate.
thanx for ur comments, ppl love compliments like yrs u know
-kat-
UTurnAwayWhenICaptureUrGlance

Hi Kat_kat,
First of all, thanks for correcting me: In this context, "visual aids" should always be used in plural form. I did my study overseas, yet my English is full of faults.
I think your university is "Ngoai Thuong HN", is it right? I know that NT students are very bright since the entry exam is very tough. But I don''t think that everyone in NT writes as well as you do; you must be one of the few I guess.
Anyway, I still have some suggestions for you.
1/ You should never use punctuation at the end of session headings. E.g. "Part I: How to manage conflicts:" should not have the colon ":" at the end.
2/ A list should be grammatically complete. That means if the leading text is not grammatically complete, the following items should complete it.
E.g. Each day I eat:
a-an orange,
b-an apple, and
c-a full bowl of rice.
Notice the commas at the end of the first two items, the full stop at the end of the last, and the "and" after the 2nd.
Otherwise, if the leading text is grammatically complete, the following items should all be with full stops and the first letters should be capitalized.
3/ Many inappropriate use of semi-colons, double quotes, parentheses in your article.
Don''t be alarmed though: Your writing is quite suitable as preparation texts for an oral presentation. But for a research paper, or a thesis you''ll probably have to pay more attention. (Hell, I was picked into pieces by the professors at my university, may be the profs at yours will not be as picky.)
Anyway, here are some links that I think may be useful.
1/ Elements of Style: http://www.bartleby.com/141/
Although pretty old (1918), it is still a classic reference.
2/ The Writing Center: http://www.wisc.edu/writing/
A more "task-oriented" approach.
Happy reading,
--Pippin