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các pác giúp em xem cái personal statement này có ổn ko ( apply uni - economic)

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My attraction to the economic world and business stemmed from my parents?T job, both are experienced businessmen. It has been confirmed when I took A level business. My ultimate goal would be to follow a career in business field. As citizen of Vietnam ?" a rapid developing country, there are many issues that excite me about its economics. Business has shown me the fundamental part it plays in variety aspects of our life. I would like to approach it at a higher level with an eye-opening. I have particularly applied to your university not only because of its reputation in economic, business field but also because of its friendly environment an excellent teaching quality.

At the moment, I am studying three A-level subjects at .......... sixth form included maths, business an accounts. I am enormously enjoying studying business and have thought that my widen background knowledge would enable me to have a fairly basis in which to engage in the study of economic or business. My other a level subject ?" maths has been always my favourite an strong subject an I have achieve good grades in 3 modules so far. Maths needs the use of practices analysis and problem solving skills which might benefit my degree.

Having spent almost years of my life in Vietnam- a developing country that has recovered from the ravages of war in the past 30 years, coming to the UK I have gained further understanding value of money. I have worked part time as a waiter for 2 months. It has been a crucial stage to me. It gave me the insight about what a job requires. Because the job involved dealing with the public therefore my communication skills have greatly improved. I learned to motivate myself and manage time effectively when working. I also have built in the responsibilities of teamwork and help my personal confidence.

During my spare time, keep up with recent news by reading on the internet or through newspapers (Vietnamese and English) mostly about sciences, sport and entertainment. I often access to some discussion forums on the internet; I think it could help me to become more strong held ideas person which does improve my presentation skills. I enjoy travelling and meeting people from diverse cultural backgrounds. In the past, I has been to Hong Kong, china, Thailand and France which were such eye-opening experiences. I have been learning IT for years so that now I have basic IT skills in Microsoft programmes, besides, I have a keen passion in video e***ing and using Photoshop techniques which are good fun. My other hobbies are equally varied from swimming, badminton, football to dancing and playing guitar.

I trust that through this brief statement, based on my personal enthusiasm, I have convinced you a further course of study. I am well-motivated, active and ambitious person who will want to be challenged of a university course. I hope to make a valuable contribution to your institute.