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Đây là bài viết về animals. Thầy giáo mình có nói là bài này vocab khá tốt, tuy vậy ideas chưa thực sự thuyết phục lắm. Có gì các bạn góp ý thêm cho hoàn thiện nhé.
?oZoos are sometimes seen as necessary but poor alternative to a natural environment. It is necessary to keep animals in zoos. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement??
In recent years, animal preservation has rekindled an ever-growing number of controversies. While some zoologists claim that conservative centers may turn out to be an unsatisfactory substitute for a natural environment, it is true that the presence of these centers has played such a crucial role in protecting animals worldwide.
The 20th century witnessed the disappearance of numerous rare creatures on earth, which posed a severe threat to the balance of the ecosystem. As a consequence, it is of fundamental importance to preserve endangered races and protect them from the potential of extinction. Today, this urgent task has become the primary responsibility of zoos worldwide, where animals are not only intensively reared but their futures are also thoroughly secured. Admittedly, by preserving genes of would-be vanished species, various animals will probably be saved and embark upon a brighter life.
Another feasible explanation for the necessity of zoos in today?Ts time is that they have contributed a substantial part in insulating animals from the effects of nature and human. Wildlife has been increasingly tough and animals are confronting with an abundance of hazards. For instance, climate changes, with prolonged droughts or acute floods, have led to a scarcity of food and water. Furthermore, people?Ts desire for animals?T leather has driven some species to the verge of extinction. For these reasons, there is no doubt that zoos are an effective solution to tackle this worrisome situation.
In summary, keeping animals in zoos may result in both advantages and disadvantages. However, as the drawbacks appear to be insignificant compared with other positive impacts, it is vital that conservative centers be widely developed,bringing a better life to animals throughout the world.
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Được soleil2210 sửa chữa / chuyển vào 10:13 ngày 05/06/2009

Bài trên có GR và vocab ngon lành Ideas nói chung khi thi IELTS cũng ko quan trọng bằng GR và vocab dc
EARLY MARRIAGE
Whether early marriage should be allowed has become a controversial issue. Some people suggest that early marriage depends on the right of woman. However, in my opinion, this phenomenon should not been permittedto be legal for the following reasons: having bad influence on women?Ts health, creating working and financial pressure, giving negative effects on society.
grammar
It appears that when a woman has to get married since she is still too young, chances for her job may reduce significantly. Besides, she will find it difficult to receive a good education in the future because her time might be used mainly for taking care her family. This is due to the fact that early marriage often comes from poverty. When one family has no better way that letting a girl get marriaged to a certain man, that means life of all the rest in her family almost rely on her. Such arranged marriage undoubtedly affects adversely on her mental and physical health, put her into a very passive and tough situation.
In ad***ion to bad effects on the woman?Ts health, the financial pressure is also another factor, not only for herself but also for her new family. Some people ask themselves if she can get over all these obstacles at a young age. Those questions really reflects the difficult situation that a young woman will have to experience especially after giving birth. If there are no funds or support from external organization, it will dramatically hard for her.
Finally, if the government does not give any specific law to ban early marriage, the society will become surely poor for lacking of labour force. According to a recent survey in developing countries, the situation fo lacking of female labour force has dramatic upwards trend in comparison to itself last year, becoming a challenge to leaders. It is apparently that women are half of the world and female white collars , specifically, play a very positive role in accelerating the development of those countries. Besides, when not having chance to get suitable jobs due to inadequate education, women will by no means have to find worse ones and the consequence is the society has *****ffer from it.
For all things concerned above, early marriage should be banned. Society needs womens?T ability like they rely on society.
Bài này mình viết idea cũng hơi lởm , bạn nào comment grammar và vocab được thì mình xin cảm ơn và hậu tạ.

It appears that when a woman has to get married since she is still too young ------>.... at a young age.
chances for her job may reduce significantly-----> she will have fewer chances to develope her own career .
she will find it difficult to receive a good education in the future------> ...pursue higher education...
This is due to the fact that early marriage often comes from poverty---------- đoạn nè e nghĩ nên sửa là This may be due to.... vì đâu phải ai kết hôn sớm cũng vì poverty đâu, đánh giá phiến diện
the society will become surely poor for lacking of labour force-------- câu nè cũng thía. bỏ surely
it will dramatically hard for her.------> it will be....
If there are no funds....-----> there is no fund....
in comparison to------>....with
sửa rùi, sửa sai cũng phải vote nhá

Thank for nice post

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It appears that when a woman has to get married since she is still too young ------>.... at a young age.
chances for her job may reduce significantly-----> she will have fewer chances to develope her own career .
she will find it difficult to receive a good education in the future------> ...pursue higher education...
This is due to the fact that early marriage often comes from poverty---------- đoạn nè e nghĩ nên sửa là This may be due to.... vì đâu phải ai kết hôn sớm cũng vì poverty đâu, đánh giá phiến diện
the society will become surely poor for lacking of labour force-------- câu nè cũng thía. bỏ surely
it will dramatically hard for her.------> it will be....
If there are no funds....-----> there is no fund....
in comparison to------>....with
sửa rùi, sửa sai cũng phải vote nhá
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vote hỏng rồi . vot mãi mà k được
mà IN COMPARISON TO thì cũng có sai đâu ?
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vote hỏng rồi . vot mãi mà k được
mà IN COMPARISON TO thì cũng có sai đâu ?
thank be'''' con
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Theo em nhớ là compared to còn in comparison with.. Vote hỏng thì vote lại típ đê

vote hỏng rồi . vot mãi mà k được
mà IN COMPARISON TO thì cũng có sai đâu ?
thank be'''''''' con
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Theo em nhớ là compared to còn in comparison with.. Vote hỏng thì vote lại típ đê
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Dân ta phải biết sử ta
Nếu mà ko biết thì tra google
Anh có Longman contemporary dict nên tra luôn , và kết quả ĐAAAY
1comparing [uncountable] the process of comparing two or more people or things [? compare, comparative]
comparison with
Comparison with his previous movies shows how Lee has developed as a director.
in comparison (with/to something)
In comparison to other recent video games, this one isn''t very exciting.
He was a loud friendly man. In comparison, his brother was rather shy.
by comparison (with something)
By comparison with other European countries, car prices in the UK are very high.
After months of living in a tropical climate, Spain seemed cool by comparison.
for comparison (with something)
These figures are provided for comparison with the results of previous studies.
He showed us the original text for comparison.
Her paintings invite comparison with those of the early Impressionists (=they remind you of them).
stand/bear comparison (=is as good as someone or something else)
Irving''s work bears comparison with the best of the modern novelists.
on comparison British English (=after you have compared two things to see if they are similar or different)
On comparison, the Renault was the more reliable of the two cars.
.... Còn nhiều nữa nhưng sợ bị vác tội spam nên stop hêre
đấy, bình chọn chứ vote thì ko thấy cái nút bấm đâu cả.
Mai mốt bán anh cái acc để anh tác nghiệp

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