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Ah, chị nhận luôn vụ làm game and relax, nhưng có lẽ là phải có 1 người cùng với, vì có những hôm chị không thể đi học được. Ai xung phong nào?

Anh! (hỗ trợ kỹ thuật, sau cánh gà và hướng dẫn người chơi).
He, sắp kỉ niệm bài viết thứ 100 rồi!

Kỷ niệm bài viết thứ 100, Lovemít xin post bài lấy hên!
The graphs show the sectoral of Gross Domestic Product and employment of developing country between 1986 and 1995.
In term of GDP, services were always the highest percentage of GDP from 1986 to 1995. However, they were gradual decline, from 66% in 1983 to 56% at 1995. in 1986, natural resources were at about 26%, they decreased slightly until 1993 at nearly 20%, followed by a rise 3% one year late, but they went down at around 15% in 1995. Industry was the lowest percent in 1986 at 10%. But between 1986 and 1995, it rose gradually at 20%. In 1995, it was higher than natural Resources but lower services.
Otherwise, in 1992, employment sectors in natural resources was highest percent at 77.4%. It was nearly five times as much as services and about 20 times than industry and other. Industry and other branches were the same to employment but GDP in industry was double at 15.4%. (158 words)
May quá! Cuối cùng cũng xong! Nặn mãi mới trên 150 từ. Ai ơi, sửa hộ nhé! Rất vui vì là người thứ 3. Thật là hên!
Được lovemit sửa chữa / chuyển vào 09:30 ngày 26/01/2007

Thôi hỏng, mình bị nhầm bài rồi....
Lie: Hình như em đưa cho anh nhầm bài hay sao ý, bài của anh là FOOD FOR THOUGHT cơ mà

Here is my writting. Hope that u will have some comment on it so we can also find out what is our weakness.
GDP and the employment ratio are important indicators for an economy and now we will have some analysis and investigate the relationship between these two items. Overall the GDP is mostly contributed by four sectors: Natural Resources, Industry, Services and other. As a developing country, most of country labour force was focused on Natural exploration about 77.4% of total work force but this force only made up for 19.2% of total GDP where as Industry sector which used only 3.6% of labour force but it made up 15.4% of GDP, another highly GDP contribute sector is services which only employed 15.3% of total work force but it accounted for about 58% of total GDP. However these contribution on GDP had some changes thought time, the natural resources and services had gradually declined since 1992 to about 17% and 55% respectively in 1995. In contrast, the contribution of industry sector to overall GDP has sharply increased to more than 20% in 1995. In conlusion, Whereas other sector still stay the same or have declines in the GDP ratio, the industry has play more and more importain role in the economy.
Xong rồi đấy ạ. Mọi người xem giúp mình nhé.

hix em nhầm ạ? anh thử tìm lại xem ạ , bài viết MONEY AS A UNIT OF ACCOUNT em đưa cho mọi người hôm offline đó .But nếu anh tìm không thấy thì thôi , đến chiều em đưa cho anh làm lại nha !

Hê lô Ô hai ô!
Looking at the graphs we can see that this country was concentrating on developing the industry. Focusing on the industry line we can see its increasing trend at a steady pace, looks like they were on the right track. Moving on the natural resources percentage of GDP, It shows that natural resources played less important role in GDP year by year which was good. The country became more and more dependent, they can take the advantage of their resources by using them not just exporting or selling them out.
But on the contrary, despite of the positive view of the industry and natural resources we worry about the services of this country. The Services line decreased gradually. It supposed to increase but actually it didn?Tt. Some policy of developing Services should be carried out to overcome this situation?.. need discussing more on this! !

liebedu
The two graphs give information about the GDP and employment sectors of a developing country . mẫu câu giống đề bài, nên change.
In the first graph , the sectoral distribution of employment is devided into 4 fields : natural resources , industry, services, other. Statistics in this graph show that GDP by no means depends on the sectoral distribution of employment ( using documents in 1992). có vẻ mang ý nghĩa đánh giá cá nhân (cấm in task 1).For example , the rate of employment in natural resources monopolized (từ này có vẻ ko đúng, có thể dùng were highest percent at)77.4% , but it just had 19.2% GDP. As for services (with Trade , restaurants, hotels) , the rate of employment was only 4.9% , a low rate . But , its (their)GDP was very high ( 37.5% ) chỗ này ko compare với cái gì ah? do vậy lại mang tính đánh giá cá nhân.
The next graph points out (hihi, hổng thấy point out, give me at this evening, Lie! maybe change by "describe" or some thing like that) the percentage of GDP from 1986 to 1995 . Percentage of GDP (lặp)in these years is fairly steady .We can see (bỏ đoạn này)the GDP in industry is the lowest ( fluctuating from 9 - 20% ) , and services is the highest ( fluctuating from 50 - 67%) . By and large , GDP in 2 fields : services and natural resources had (ko ổn, dùng động từ to be là thích hợp nhất)a downtrend ; but in industry, the tendency was rising. (hì hì, ko biết nhận xét sao nữa)
*****m up , GDP - the Gross Domestic Product - rises or falls doesn?Tt depend on the rate of employment . (Wrong way u know? Ban applying your idea in task one) (170 words-that''s good)
by no means : không chút nào, ko tí nào
, nếu anh có chữa sai chỗ nào thì tối bàn nhé!

àh ha , anh lovemit thiếu phần kết luận nha !
-on ur third line , u should say "[tt][ be on decline [/tt] ", instead of only saying " be decline" .
- " at " becomes " in"
...còn tiếp tục ...
Được liebedu sửa chữa / chuyển vào 11:46 ngày 26/01/2007

why can''t i give my privative idea in the passage ? it''ll make my writing softer , right ? cos i think here is a commenting passage ...so , ..."we can see.." and "the second sentence in pagraph two is okay!
when i described the stastics in 1992 , i did not want to care for the qualification( highest or lowest percentage or something like that..) do u understand what i mean ?
ANYWAYS , Thanks for ur ideas !