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kiku học cử nhân tài năng hay sao mà phải dịch bài kinh tế thế?

Theo đúng tinh thần của critical thinking, em ghi nhận ý kiến của các bác nhưng em cũng có các phản biện sau.
1. "There has been much debate among general public on the question of what can be done to improve the quality of education"
Câu này em dựa vào câu ví dụ của mục từ "debate" trong cuốn Oxford Advanced Learner''s Dictionary 7th E***ion (OALD7)
Nguyên tác là:
"There had been much debate on the issue of childcare"
2. "Some people believe that to achieve this aim, computers should be abandoned in schools"
Không hiểu câu này sai ở đâu
3. "In the first place, computers are the main tool accessing on the Internet that is a great source of information"
Đúng là câu này hơi có vấn đề thật, có thể chữa lại là
"In the first place, computers are the main tool used to access on the Internet that is a great source of information"
4."Students can easily google to find what they need"
Hiện giờ trong OALD7 đã có mục từ "google" có nghĩa là : to type words into a search engine on the Internet in order to find information about sb/sth.
5. "Another important reason why the use of computers should not be banned in schools is that computers are also a computing tool in the true sense of the word"
Dịch nôm na đoạn cuối là...
"...máy tính cũng đồng thời là một công cụ tính tóan theo đúng nghĩa đen của từ chỉ"
không hiểu văn phạm Anh có hiểu câu này không nhỉ
6."It is apparent that this is the most useful function of computers"
Câu này thì sai ở đâu nhể, tra mục từ "apparent" thì vẫn có thể dùng "not usually before noun" mờ.
7."On the other hand, the idea of abandoning computers is based on scientific surveys showing that children who spent more time on computers in schools performed slightly worse in math than those who spent less time on them"
Dựa vào một cuộc khảo sát, là cái đã xảy ra rùi thì dùng quá khứ chứ
8."Thus, the idea of eliminating computers from schools is supported, as evidenced by some computers'''''''' bad effects on children."
Đúng là đoạn cuối hơi bị lủng củng, sửa lại như này có được không nhỉ
"..., as evidenced by some bad results at math of children in shools."
9."All things considered, I hold the view that computers are necessary tools for the teaching and learning process"
Đúng là "I hold the view ..." thì hơi personal statement quá, sửa như vầy có được không.
"All things considered, it seems beyond any reasonable doubt that..."
@ bài của em kiku thì tối Sis trả lời nhé, bi giờ lại lên thư viện đây

Học Cử nhân Thiểu năng

Về phía bài chữa của em kiku, đầu tiên là cứ đã
1. There has been much debatemany debates among general public public communityon the question of what can be done to improve the quality of education. Some people believe that to achieve (informal) this aim, computers should be abandoned in schools. In my view, it is unreasonable because computers are an integral part of education thesedays.
đã nói ở trên, tra mục từ "debate" trong OALD7 thì "debate" cũng còn là uncountable noun
Câu thứ 2 thì có vấn đề gì đâu nhể ?
Câu thứ 3 thì cái "In my view" có vẻ hơi có vấn đề, có khi nên sửa thành "Other people believe that..."
2. In the first place, computers are the main tool accessing on the Internet that is a great source of information. Students can easily google to find what they need. At this point, I raise a question that do students receive enough information from their teachers alone? It is a pity that the answer is no. They gain their knowledge from not only teachers and school texts but also the Internet. Hence, computers are an indispensable tool for learning process.
đúng câu này có vấn đề khi mà muốn "raise a question" nhưng không biết phải thể hiện thế nào trong written E.
3. Another important reason why the use of computers should not be banned prohibited in schools is that computers are also a computing tool in the true sense of the word (). It is apparent that this is the most useful function of computers. With the help of computers Thanks to them, hundreds or and thousands of operations are solved/conducted faster/more efficiently and more exact/accurate than any other methods. For that reason aloneonly, it not would would not be a good idea to eliminate omit ( computers from schools
Cái đoạn này thì cám ơn kiku nhé, Sis vẫn bị nhầm từ ngữ formal và informal.
4.On the other hand, the idea opinion of abandoning computers is based on is due to the scientific survey result showing that children who spent spend more time on computers in schools performed slightly r worse in at maths than those who spentspend less time on them. Thus, the idea of eliminating the opinion of omitting computers from schools is supported/approved, as evidenced proved by some computers'''''''''''''''' bad effects consequences for children.
- Cái ý kiến thì phải "dựa vào" ( base on) chứ không thể "bởi vì" (due to) do "due to" dùng để chỉ "nguyên nhân tất yếu, trực tiếp" chứ không phải "nguyên nhân thứ yếu".
- Do dựa vào các cuộc khảo sát trước nên dùng quá khứ "spent"
- câu cuối : tra mục từ "evidence" (OALD7)thì cũng có thể chấp nhận được cách dùng này.
5. All things considered In the end/in conclusion/in brief/in short, computers are necessary tools for the teaching and learning process. Although it is a controversial issue, people now believe in the necessity of computers in schools. Personally, I do hope that It is my strong belief that(the same form "it is" as above, <- not good) as the years pass by, with the assistance of computers people will gain obtain great achievements in education.
- Cái "All things considered" thì cũng đâu có vấn đề gì đâu. Ở đây lại là hợp lý nhất vì đã xem xét cả 2 khía cạnh của vấn đề.
- "it is controversial" là chuẩn đấy chứ ?
Được chicken_fund sửa chữa / chuyển vào 20:37 ngày 12/04/2007

1. There has been much debatemany debates among general public public communityon the question of what can be done to improve the quality of education. Some people believe that to achieve (informal) this aim, computers should be abandoned in schools. In my view, it is unreasonable because computers are an integral part of education thesedays.
Câu thứ 2 thì có vấn đề gì đâu nhể ? Vấn đề là dùng từ
Câu thứ 3 thì cái "In my view" có vẻ hơi có vấn đề, có khi nên sửa thành "Other people believe that..." -> sửa thành in my opinion/ in my viewpoint/ in my point of view...
4.On the other hand, the idea opinion of abandoning computers is based on is due to the scientific survey result showing that children who spent spend more time on computers in schools performed slightly r worse in at maths than those who spentspend less time on them. Thus, the idea of eliminating the opinion of omitting computers from schools is supported/approved, as evidenced proved by some computers'''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''' bad effects consequences for children.
- Cái ý kiến thì phải "dựa vào" ( base on) chứ không thể "bởi vì" (due to) do "due to" dùng để chỉ "nguyên nhân tất yếu, trực tiếp" chứ không phải "nguyên nhân thứ yếu". Ok
- Do dựa vào các cuộc khảo sát trước nên dùng quá khứ "spent"-Hành động khảo sát là của quá khứ nhưng kết quả, kết luận mang tính chất hiện tại để chứng minh cho vấn đề hiện tại Nói như Sis thì khảo sát, nghiên cứu chả có nghĩa lý gì với hiện tại nhỉ?
- câu cuối : tra mục từ "evidence" (OALD7)thì cũng có thể chấp nhận được cách dùng này. -> Cái này e học Sis
5. [s]All things considered In the end/in conclusion/in brief/in short, computers are necessary tools for the teaching and learning process. Although it is a controversial issue, people now believe in the necessity of computers in schools. Personally, I do hope that It is my strong belief that(the same form "it is" as above, <- not good) as the years pass by, with the assistance of computers people will gain[/s] obtain great achievements in education.
- Cái "All things considered" thì cũng đâu có vấn đề gì đâu. Ở đây lại là hợp lý nhất vì đã xem xét cả 2 khía cạnh của vấn đề.
Kinh nghiệm truyền từ cô giáo của e, cứ giữ nguyên cái form mà chơi. 50 bài viết, 50 bài cấu trúc như nhau. Đi thi có một bài, nên không sợ lặp. Nên cứ theo truyền thông cho nhanh gọn, dễ nhớ. Chứ câu của Sis ko vấn đề gì
- "it is controversial" là chuẩn đấy chứ ? chuẩn của văn nói, e nghe nó cụt lủn
Sis nhớ học kỹ phần e vừa post đấy nhé.

Bài "To improve education, forget computers" thì nộp rồi, nhưng thứ 2 còn phải nộp 2 bài cũng khủng không kém, trong đó có một bài về thể loại report - một thể loại chưa từng viết bao giờ. Các bác chuẩn bị tinh thần correct cho em nhá

Chủ nhật giời đánh.
Tức quá

Correct dùm em cái này với
"More and more people are buying and drinking bottled water rather than drinking tap water. There are many more drawbacks to this than there are benefits". To what extent do you agree ?
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There are strong arguments for and against bottled water in general public. Some people believe that using tap water has a lot of of advantages than using bottled water. In my viewpoint, bottled water is increasingly chosen because of its indisputable outstanding points.
In the first place, bottled water provides consumers with consistant safety and high quality. Before being bottled, natural water, which comes from protected sources, is undergone supercharged oxygen and ultraviolet light process. Bottled water is also experimented and subsequently to be guaranteed by health organizations. At this point, consumers completely trust in bottled water in its safety and quality.
Another important reason why people choose bottled water is that bottled water is convenient to use. By plastic bottles, bottled water is distributed in the markets. Consumers can own bottled water whenever they want. In ad***ion, it is undeniable that bottled water is easy to use because of its movable characteristic.
On the other hand, the opinion of choosing tap water is based on evidences showing that tap water is not only as good as bottled water in quality but also cheaper 1000 times than bottled water. These evidences, however, come from environmentally friendly countries where people can drink water straight out of the tap.
All things considered, I hold the view that bottled water is an appropriate beverage for people theseday. Although it is controversial, people now believe that bottled water will replace tap water in near future. It is seems beyond any reasonable doubt that the more using bottled water the safer people health is.

Correct giùm em bài này nữa...
Write an information report identifying and describing the advertising techniques that are used to target children.
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Advertising is popular method to promote products to consumers. There are many kinds of advertising techniques for each kind of consumer. This report will describe several main techniques used to target children.
First of all, "Ideal kids" or "Role Models" is a general techinique. The term " Ideal Kids" refers to children who are adept at doing something. For example, a weak boy suddenly become stronger whe n he drinks "Milo" - a kind of nutrition drink. He even win at the hardest athletic competition in his school.
Another important technique is "Free offers" or "Premiums". Children are excited about not only main products but also some extra presents. Many famous fast-food producers, such as Orion, often use to promote their products. When children buy a Chocopie box - name of instant cake of Orion, they are given a jigsaw puzzle. In some cases, children seem to be interested in jigsaw puzzle rather than instant cake.
Last but not least, "Sound effects" and "Life-like settings" are used to make a good impression on children. Sound can make toys seem more life-like or less life-like. Toys, which are usually main characters in music video, can do extraordinary things. An illustration of this is a toy car can leap over rivers and trenches. Most children, who are under 8 years old, are amazed at this advertisements and subsequently require their parents to purchase that toy.