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general:
good introduction, good main body, but check those in yellow
explaination of the word "life-like"
not too many grammar errors
no conclusion
details:
for the term "ideal kids", i dont understand u get it from, but no description of how the technique is developed to target children. similarly to the rest two techniques, u mentioned nothig about why and how the techniques are chosen and developed to target to children. examples u''ve given are good. there''s one thing about the third technique, toys, u should classify toys to 2 groups, and which kind of toys should be appropriate and which one should be removed from children.
that''s it. kekkeke
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commént:
gud introduction, body and conclusion
check those in yellow
need some complementary information
- tap water used popularly in developed countries, where tap water is treated and refined completely before use.--> state of the art technology?
- in developing countries, tap water is not used, why?
bla bla bla

"More and more people are buying and drinking bottled water rather than drinking tap water. There are many more drawbacks to this than there are benefits". To what extent do you agree ?
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There are strong arguments for and against bottled water in general public. Some people believe that using tap water has a lot of of advantages than - (never have i seen such a comparative grammar form)[h]rather than, instead of using bottled water. In my viewpoint, bottled water is increasingly chosen because of its indisputable outstanding points. cliche''
In the first place, bottled water provides consumers with consistant safety and high quality. Before being bottled, natural water, which comes from protected sources, is [h]undergone supercharged oxygen and ultraviolet light process disenfected by ozone, a form of oxygen leaving no chemical residual aftertaste and low level of lead . Bottled water is also experimented and subsequently to be guaranteed (not adaptable to the V1 form) guaranteed, in case imply the future meaning using "will be guaranteed". Any way, it''s unnessary coz this is a repeating processby health organizations. At this point, consumers completely trust in bottled water in its safety and quality bottled waters'' safety and quality.
Another important reason why people choose bottled water is that bottled water is convenient to use. By plastic bottles (Vietnamese thinking) Storing in plastic bottles , bottled water is distributed in to the markets. Consumers can own bottled water whenever they want. In ad***ion, it is undeniable that bottled water is easy to use because of its movable portable characteristic.
On the other hand, the opinion of choosing tap water is based on evidences showing (not neccessary) that tap water is not only as good as bottled water in quality but also cheaper 1000 times 1000 times cheaper than bottled water. These evidences, however, come from environmentally friendly countries where people can drink water straight out of from the tap.
All things considered, I hold the view that bottled water is an appropriate beverage for people theseday. Although it is controversial, people now believe that bottled water will replace tap water in near future. It is seems seems[/hl] beyond any reasonable doubt that the more using bottled water the safer people health is. the more bottled water is used, the safer people health is [/hl] means what?
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"More and more people are buying and drinking bottled water rather than drinking tap water. There are many more drawbacks to this than there are benefits". To what extent do you agree ?
--- *** ---
There are strong arguments for and against bottled water in general public. Some people believe that using tap water has a lot of of advantages than - (never have i seen such a comparative grammar form)rather than, instead of using bottled water. In my viewpoint, bottled water is increasingly chosen because of its indisputable outstanding points. cliche''
In the first place, bottled water provides consumers with consistant safety and high quality. Before being bottled, natural water, which comes from protected sources, is undergone supercharged oxygen and ultraviolet light process (so vague)disenfected by ozone, a form of oxygen leaving no chemical residual aftertaste and low level of lead . Bottled water is also experimented and subsequently to be guaranteed (not adaptable to the V1 form) should be "guaranteed", in case imply the future meaning using "will be guaranteed". Any way, it''''s unnessary coz this is a repeating processby health organizations. At this point, consumers completely trust in bottled water in its safety and quality bottled water''s safety and quality.

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Tiếng ANh với tiếng em, có 1 topic riêng rồi ko chịu post, đọc đau hết cả mắt

Write an information report identifying and describing the advertising techniques that are used to target children.
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Advertising is popular method to promote products to consumers. There are many kinds varieties (avoiding the 2 same words) of advertising techniques for each kind of consumer. This report will describe several main techniques used to target children.
First of all, "Ideal kids" or "Role Models" is a general techinique. The term " Ideal Kids" refers to children who are adept at doing something. For example, a weak boy suddenly become becomes stronger whe n he drinks "Milo" - a kind of nutrition drink. He even win wins at the hardest athletic atheletics competition in his school.
Another important technique is "Free offers" or "Premiums". Children are excited about not only main products but also some extra presents. Many famous fast-food producers, (no comma here) such as Orion, often use (must go with an o bject)to promote their products. When children buy a Chocopie box - name of instant cake of Orion, they are given a jigsaw puzzle. In some cases, children seem appear to be interested in jigsaw puzzle rather than instant cake.
Last but not least (cliche'' - informal phrase) The last technique, "Sound effects" and "Life-like settings" are used to make a good impression on children. Sound can make toys seem (seem here is useless) more life-like or less life-like. Toys, which are usually main characters in music video, can do extraordinary things. An illustration of this is a toy car (which) can leap over rivers and trenches. Most children, who are under 8 years old, under the age of 8 are amazed at this these advertisements and subsequently require their parents to purchase that toy.
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