The Water Cycle

Hi everybody!!! Water is me. Do you think I am very significant to your life? I am very proud to say õ?oYESõ?. I and my friends make up seventy percent of the Earthõ?Ts surface, and people rely on us *****stain life. We create rainfalls to nurture crops. Especially, we are extremely necessary to all of you when you feelõ?Ư thirsty. HEHE
 
Fortunately, I have an opportunity to travel all over the world remarkably. In reality, I am studying in school, so I donõ?Tt possess enough money to take this long trip. However, I have a very potential sponsor who helps me make my dream come true. Can you predict whom??? That is my father, õ?oThe Sunõ?.
 
First of all, my father warms me and transforms me into vapor. Oh no, I am as careless as forgetting to tell you that I has several forms õ?" liquid, vapor, and ice. Ok, letõ?Ts go back to my world trip. Once I have been evaporated, I rise into the atmosphere. At this time, I am vapor. As the air gets colder at higher altitudes, I condense and cling to particles in the air. Now, I am sure that u might know how clouds are formed.
 
Hmm, this plane seems to not want to carry me anymore. HUHU. The pilot teases me. He says that I m too heavy. Therefore, he lets me fall to the earth freely. He is so wicked to me. By the way, he also helps you to know how rains are appeared.
 
Now, I have been returned to the earth. Hey! Amazingly, I have been traveling the half of earth. I am paying a visit to Europe. Wonderfully!!! When I am on my way to England, I meet my uncle Gravity accidentally. He forces me lower and lower into the ground where he lives. To stop by his house, I must infiltrate the soil. But, the soil is very dense, I cannot go through it. So, I cannot visit my uncleõ?Ts house. (If I can infiltrate the soil as well as my uncle can, the percolation will be occurred)
 
I have been far from home for a long period of time. Oh My God, I miss my house so much. I have traveled many countries in the world; I think that my house is the best place for me though. Donõ?Tt let me wait more. My mom Ocean grants me her permission to enter into her currents to Vung Tau seacoast. I come back!!!
 

as far as I''ve known that in "literature writing" people don''t include informal words/phrases such as OK or Oh My God , except they do it intentionally .
and... IMO , if you can write a 500-word essay like this at ease , say ... 15 minutes or less, I consider your writing is pretty good

Should we use "He he" in english writing?

When you are Water (with the capital W), you represent all the water in the Universal (or the Earth, maybe). Only if you were a drop of water, can you have siblings (brothers/sisters but NOT friends) cause later you''re referring father, mother.....
Decide who you are first (Water or just a drop of water) and follow the logic flow, everything will become just natural.
Some other small issues. People say "My friends and I..." not "I and my friends...".
I miss my home/family not I miss my house. Maybe in this case, you just miss your house .
More to come if I have time

Hey miss Water, Have you ever been to Japan? If so? Tell me more about Japan

Á, anh A Lếch Xăng Đờ Lếch ơi, em hẻm cố tình spam topic đâu, Vì lần đầu post bài nên ko tránh khỏi sai sót ý mà. Có câu ko biết ko có tội. HIHI. Mai mốt em post bài vô đây là được rùi chứ gì. HIX
Mụch đích post topic đơn giản vì em nghĩ được vài đề tài vui vui nên muốn share cho mọi người đọc thui mà. Nhân đây ai có dề tài nào hay hay về any fields such as botany, science, medicine, history... thi post bài cho em xem zới. Chân thành cảm ơn mọi người nói chung và anh A Lếch Xăng Đờ Lếch nói riêng ạ.
P/S: Để cảm ơn sự đóng góp lớn lao của anh A Lếch Xăng Đờ Lếch cho English Club, kỳ sau em sẽ post bài tặng anh. My next topic is Carnivorous Plants. Anh A Lếch Xăng Đờ Lếch ơi! you have many same characteristics to these plants. Hoho.
Sand Dunes
 
I am sure that all of you can imagine what the deserts are. When we hear about the word ?odeserts?, we might think about the places which are very hot and contain huge quantities of sand. However, have you ever been wondering where enormous volumes of sand come from? Well, I will replace all of you to answer this question. HIHI. The large amounts of sand are eroded from mountains and carried to the desserts by wind and water. Hmm, I bet these processes are occurred incessantly through thousands of years. Do you agree with me that it is an amazing phenomenon? By the way, deserts are formed like that.
 
Well, in reality, my main topic today does not mention about deserts. I am very exciting to introduce to you SAND DUNES of various shapes. Now, let?Ts explore the whole of desert and find out the mysterious things in it.
 
After spending a lot of money and 2 days traveling by plane, I come to Sahara eventually. The Sahara is actually not a desert, but many deserts, distinct and different in nature and landscapes.
 
First thing I can see, as I put my foot in deserts, is ?oCrescent dunes?. The word ?ocrescent? represents for the moon in her first quarter. Crescent dunes form on the edges of deserts where there is less sand and where the winds blow mainly in one direction. Well, there is an interesting thing about these dunes. They can shift as much as 20 meters per year by the wind. OH! Crescent dunes seem to have feet.
 
As we known, ?oCrescent dunes? are formed at the place where there is less sand and where the winds blow in one direction. On the other hand, ?oStar-shaped dunes? are formed at the place where there are massive amounts of sand and where the winds blow in different directions. For one thing, ?oStar-shaped dunes? are more stable than ?oCrescent dunes?. Well, it means that Star-shaped dunes don?Tt have feet to run. HEHE. However, we will not disregard these dunes when they can reach incredible heights, up to 80 meters high. Of course, they are quite common in massive deserts such as Sahara.
If ?oCrescent dunes? form on the edges of deserts, ?oRidge dunes? form generally in the interiors of deserts where the winds blow in one direction. In the eyes of these con***ions, parallel ridges of sand form at right angles to the wind.
 
HUHU. Our deserted expe***ion is over. I must catch a taxi to the airport. Hopefully, I have enough money to get plane ticket for going back Vietnam. See you soon!!!
 

Thanks for these writings, kiss, well done .
Very interesting, I must say.
There are some minor points to notice:
- carried to the desserts by wind
- these processes are occurred incessantly
- to mention about
- the wind/s: nếu nói gió chung chung thì ko nên dùng "the wind"
- As we known
- use of tenses: After spending a lot of money and 2 days traveling by plane, I come to Sahara eventually
Được traitimvn084 sửa chữa / chuyển vào 18:43 ngày 29/06/2008

Củm ơn traitimvn084 đã giúp cho bài của mình hoàn chỉnh hơn nha. Mình xin post thêm bài lên nữa để mọi người tham khảo và giúp mình sửa chữa bài.
P/S: Anh A Lếch Xăng Đờ Lếch ơi, em giữ đúng lời hứa tặng anh bài post này, " Carnivorous Plants" úp nhé
Carnivorous Plants
Do you know the meaning of the words ?oCarnivore? and ?oHerbivore?? Well, ?oCarnivore? refers to the kind of animals eating meat, and ?oHerbivore? refers to the kind of animals eating grass. In this case, ?oCarnivorous plants? are defined as plants which are most likely to eat insects. To be honest, I hate these plants. But, they are very strange and interesting plants for us to analyze carefully. HIHI. I bet that all of you also feel curious about ?oCarnivorous plants?. Don?Tt let you wait anymore. Let?Ts trigger our exploration by seeking the difference between ?oCarnivorous plants? and ?oplants?.
 
Unlike the majority of plants that create their nourishment from sunlight, such as water hyacinth, or dandelion, Carnivorous plants enhance their diet by catching insects *****pplement the food that they have produced from sunlight. Hmm, I think ?oCarnivorous plants? are so greedy. And I sympathize with careless, small animals. HUHU.
 
Well, have you ever seen any ?oCarnivorous plants? before? I have seen them ? through online pictures. HIHI. As a master of a fact, these plants camouflage themselves in harmless-looking. That is the way how they cheat poor insects maliciously.
 
Ok, we will step by step to categorize several kinds of ?oCarnivorous plants? and detect how they ensnare their treys. HEHE.
 
?oButterwort?!!! How do you feel when you hear this word? When I listen to it, I imagine that I am eating bread and butter. It is extremely delicious! Oh oh, sorry, I seem to go far from our topic. HIHI. Well, Butterwort is one of kinds of ?oCarnivorous plants? with circles of flat and sticky leaves. If an insect is unfortunate enough to land on the seemingly inviting leaves, it sticks the surface of the leaf and eventually dies. The plant will digest it completely. The insect is so poor *****ffer a severe death. HIXHIX.
 

We will move on the next kind of Carnivorous plants?T family. These plants are related to pitchers. Actually, they are shaped like pitchers. And, the ?opitcher plant? contains a pool of fluid at the bottom instead of beautiful flowers. GRU GRU, what an ugly pitcher plant is! Insects are attracted to the pitcher plant by nectar around the rim of the pitcher opening. When an insect lands on the rim, it cannot maintain its balance on the slippery surface of the rim and falls into the opening and downs in the fluid. HUHU. I hate these plants so much.
 
Another kind of Carnivorous plants is ?oBladderwort?. ?oBladderworts? are water plants with traps on their leaves that resemble tiny bubbles. Hmm, what do you think about these tiny bubbles? Are they fragile in your mind? HEHE. I am scared that they are not like that. Let?Ts see! When the small animal comes too close to the plant, the harmless-looking bubbles open without warning and the animal is pulled inside the plant and ? digested. OAOA. Carnivorous plants are so wicked!
 
Among many kinds of Carnivorous plants, the best known one is the Venus flytrap. (Venus is thần Vệ Nữ + flytrap is bẩy ruồi = bẩy ruồi thần Vệ Nữ). Just kidding!!! If an unwary ladybug or dragonfly settles on the leaves of the Venus Flytrap, the two leaves suddenly snap shut, trapping the insect and creating a delicious meal for the plant. That is all about ?oCarnivorous plants?. See you later.