this is summer-rain's essay that I corrected

I used to have a dream of being a boy. I wanted to be a boy so bad that I kept asking my mother why I was not. I would have loved to be a boy.
I was born into a family of which men are major. I knew many boys 'games such as football, table tennis, marbles, etc; but I barely knew any girls' games. I was a tomboy. I remembered that one day, after a long business trip, my father brought me a very beautiful doll but I wasnâ?Tt interested in it that much. I played with her for only one hour, and then I broke it. I wondered why my doll's eyes could blink so I broke her head, and took out her eyes to find out how they could blink. Since then, my parents never bought me dolls again. My mother didn't want me to behave like a boy so she did not allow me to play boys 'games. She said that it was terrible. I had even been locked in my room for the whole day just because of wearing shorts while playing football with my guy friends. At that time, I wished I were a boy so that I could play freely. When I grew up a bit, I felt jealous of my brothers. I had to do all the housework while they did not have to do anything. They said that chores were womenâ?Ts duties. I felt so unlucky because of being a girl.
The dream of being a boy followed me until the day I realized that I was lucky to be a girl. I look better than boys do. They cannot wear cute staffs like I do. They donâ?Tt have the emotions like I do. And moreover, I can drive them crazy just because who I am. I am proud of doing works that men do not know how to do. I am so proud of myself and the idea of being a boy disappeared from my mind since then. Being a girl is so great.





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I used to have a dream of being a boy. I wanted to be a boy so bad that I kept asking my mother why I was not. I would have loved to be a boy.
I was born into a family of which men are major. I knew many boys 'games such as football, table tennis, marbles, etc; but I barely knew any girls' games. I was a tomboy. I remembered that one day, after a long business trip, my father brought me a very beautiful doll but I wasnâ?Tt interested in it that much. I played with her for only one hour, and then I broke it. I wondered why my doll's eyes could blink so I broke her head, and took out her eyes to find out how they could blink. Since then, my parents never bought me dolls again. My mother didn't want me to behave like a boy so she did not allow me to play boys 'games. She said that it was terrible. I had even been locked in my room for the whole day just because of wearing shorts while playing football with my guy friends. At that time, I wished I were a boy so that I could play freely. When I grew up a bit, I felt jealous of my brothers. I had to do all the housework while they did not have to do anything. They said that chores were womenâ?Ts duties. I felt so unlucky because of being a girl.
The dream of being a boy followed me until the day I realized that I was lucky to be a girl. I look better than boys do. They cannot wear cute staffs like I do. They donâ?Tt have the emotions like I do. And moreover, I can drive them crazy just because who I am. I am proud of doing works that men do not know how to do. I am so proud of myself and the idea of being a boy disappeared from my mind since then. Being a girl is so great.
DTP

a silly essay corrected

http://www.doonesbury.com/strip/dailydose/index.htm
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hic !
bought or brought????
if bought --> bought for me ( or bought me ???? just asking )
They cannot wear cute staffs like I do. They donâ?Tt have the emotions like I do.( hic ! Is there any pro with this statement ??? and what is the difference when I write:"They don't have emotions like me"
( is it correct or not ! please correct me !)

It's better if we write"Being a girl is so great! "
I don't know if it's right or not !
hic !
BN
You can't control the length of your life but you can control the width and depth.

Buy - bought
Bring - brought
They can't wear fashionable outfits like I can.
They are not sensitive like me.
Gorillaz's sentence is better.

Despair is not Hopeless!​

cai Gor hoi o day la o day chi red-river dung theo y nao a ? Bought or brought ( ba mang ve hay ma mua cho chi ?) neu muh mua ( bought) thi minh dunh bought for me thi dung hon hay sao a ? em ko dam chac nen em hoi the a !?
BN
You can't control the length of your life but you can control the width and depth.

Usually parents buy toys for their children so it should be "bought."

Despair is not Hopeless!​

so ....."bought for me" , rite ?
BN
You can't control the length of your life but you can control the width and depth.

Bought me a doll
bought a doll for me

http://www.doonesbury.com/strip/dailydose/index.htm
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hihi ! cam on chu Milou nha ! bi gio thi chau hiu rui !
BN
You can't control the length of your life but you can control the width and depth.