Tuyển chọn những bài luận(essay)hay!!!GOOD ESSAY

Tuyển chọn những bài luận(essay)hay!!!GOOD ESSAY

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Hobbies are those things that we can indulge ourselves in and not feel guilty about wasting time . Hobbies can help us to relax . They also further stimulate our creative and intellectual growth . Hobbies can be a solitary venture or ones that involve others . My father has combined the two types . He grows flowers at home . He is also an active member in our community''s horticultural society . He enjoys learning about new strains of plaints , how to grow them and understand what circumstances it''s the best for them to thrive . The horticultural society gives him an opportunity to share his hobby with others with a common interest . A month or two before Spring is used for beginning of new flowers , which will be transplanted when the winters frost no longer us a threat . My father waters and monitors his little newly-born flowers . As we have a large garden , my father''s hobby is a monumental task . He has a lot of work ahead of him in the early Spring when he begins to transplant all the new flowering plants .
Hobbies are an enjoyable activity that helps make us well-rounded humans .

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My topic : Hobbies
Hobbies are those things that we can indulge ourselves in and not feel guilty about wasting time . Hobbies can help us to relax . They also further stimulate our creative and intellectual growth . Hobbies can be a solitary venture or ones that involve others . My father has combined the two types . He grows flowers at home . He is also an active member in our community''''s horticultural society . He enjoys learning about new strains of plaints , how to grow them and understand what circumstances it''''s the best for them to thrive . The horticultural society gives him an opportunity to share his hobby with others with a common interest . A month or two before Spring is used for beginning of new flowers , which will be transplanted when the winters frost no longer us a threat . My father waters and monitors his little newly-born flowers . As we have a large garden , my father''''s hobby is a monumental task . He has a lot of work ahead of him in the early Spring when he begins to transplant all the new flowering plants .
Hobbies are an enjoyable activity that helps make us well-rounded humans .

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Topico you agree or disagree with the following statement? One :should never judge a person by external appearances.Use specific reasons and details *****pport your answer.
Bài viết:
I strongly believe that people should never judge a person by external appearances.The way we look not always reflects the way we are. We can make huge mistakes if we let the external appearances tell us everything about someone.I consider that outward qualities are related in some ways to the manner we are and the way we feel inside. Sometimes the clothes we chose express our mood, how we are feeling at that moment. Also, the hairstyle, make up and many other aspects of
our look sometimes give an idea of our attitude towards life.
Even though, not all aspects or, for some people, any aspect of the personality is shown in external appearances. The look is not evident enough to communicate deep feelings, beliefs, thoughts and behaviours. There is so much more inside of a person that can only be noticed after knowing him very well.
I have met people who give an erroneous first impression. At first sight one could describe them in a completely different way from what they turn to be when you get to know them well. Before making premature conclusions we should pay attention at many other features, such as the way the person talks, the words he uses, the look in his eyes, that help us to recognize how is that person like. People?Ts values, educational background, skills and virtues lie in the inside, not in the outside. There is a great risk of missing good friends if we allow us to judge by appearances. We always should give a second chance to people to show us how they really are,
without masquerades. We have to be smart to not mistake what we see on the surface, because the main part of almost everything is hidden and not easily seen.