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With the desire to improve my English and to express my point of view.(,)I (nên bỏ attempt đi, em nghĩ thế) write this essay (,) (write an essay chứ không ai write a topic) which might contain many mistakes. Your assisstance would be appreciated.
Nowadays, (em nghĩ nên bỏ there are và who đi, shorten cái câu này lại) many people are crazy about Korea's serial films. Sometimes, I wonder (be consistent with verb tenses, once you use present, try to stick to it) what is interesting about those movies. I myself can not stand it (them) for even 5 minutes. Although personal taste(s) are different, we have to obey the standards of art (?). There are many aspects to consider (to consider thôi, không cần be) when evaluating a movie.
First, technique(s), including recording, designing and directoring, are perfect ( em xin lỗi chứ em thấy chúng nó làm dở hơi bỏ xừ ). The senses are very magnificent and the actors are very good looking and fashionable. (câu này nghe cứ nhộn nhộn sao ý ạ. Em mà sửa thì sửa thành: The movies usually carry/bring up 'magnificent' emotions and the actors and actresses are often times very good-looking and fashionable)Secondly, (em nghĩ nên bỏ I have to say đi, trong một bài luận mà cho I have to say vào nghe nó cải lương lắm) it is absolutely a waste of time to watch those movies because they repeat the same story over and over. It is usually a love story between a pretty girl and a handsome guy. They exprience obsstacles , which alwayscome from their families or their friends. However, in the end, after overcoming all hardship, they get married to each other and live a happy life. A ridiculous thing about Korean serial movies is the main character often died at the end of the movie( hê hê, em thêm đoạn này vào cho vui, các bác đừng giận nhé )
Personally, I think Vietnamese serial movies are much better than those korean ones
Is there anyone who want to (hì, chỗ này em nghĩ dùng oppose nghe chối lắm dưng mà chưa nghĩ ra từ gì, em lại sắp phải vào lớp rồi. Các bác nghĩ sao ạ?) oppose me ?
BE YOUR SELF AS THOSE WHO MATTER DONT CARE AND THOSE WHO CARE DONT MATTER

Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp 1 tí, còn lỗi dùng từ thì phải đọc nhiều mới hiểu được đúng nghĩa của từ ngữ để dùng đúng trong các context.
(After Longatum's revision)
Nowadays, (Nowadays is slang, don't use it in a formal essay) many people are crazy about Korea's serial films. many people are crazy about Korea's serial films.
There are many aspects to consider when (while should be used in this case according to Toefl Grammar) evaluating a movie.
First, the (the is required, since you mentioned the three factors of it) techniques, including recording, designing and directoring, are perfect.
Korea's serial films (Korean movies)
However, (It's not formal writing to put However at the beginning of a sentence) in the end, after overcoming all hardship, they get married to each other and live a happy life.
A ridiculous thing about Korean serial movies is the main character (correction: is that main chacracters) often died (Use die for tense consistency) at the end of the movie.
hhv, Longatum is correct about your sentence.
There is a ridiculous thing about Korean serial movies (Redundancy) is that the main character often died at the end of the movie
Chân đất mắt sõi

Thanks everybody,
I thank especially Longatum
Oh, God, Despite the fact that I'm untutored, I woder why you change "Korea's serial films" with "Korea's serial movies"?
Với bài viết, tôi muốn đánh giá về những bộ phim truyền hình của Hàn Quốc, chứ không phải là về những bộ phim truyền nhựa.
Film : là phim ảnh nói chung, nó bao gồm cả phim nhựa, phim truyền hình, phim tài liệu v.v... Và The Mirror đã dùng serial films để nói tới những bộ phim truyền hình nhiều tập được chiếu trên ti vi.
Movie: là chỉ những bộ phim nhựa bao gồm cả phim truyện và phim tài liệu 16mm, 24mm, 32, 64mm... Nói tóm lại nó chính là phim màn ảnh chiếu ngoài rạp.
I think there are many diffirents between the serial films and the movies.

The showing of Koreanâ?~s serial films on our national television have recently become popular among us. Many of us are fascinated by these episodes. Althought I canâ?Tt stand watching these Korean films for five minutes, their vast popularity has made me wonder. Sometimes I am thinking, what values have we found in those silly films? But let me put my personal references aside, I want to discuss this phenomenon and most of its aspects in an art standard professional maner.
First, I find the technicalities on those films are somewhat satisfactory. The directors have done good works directing the creation of those films. They make good choices seclecting pretty actresses, nice actors who outfitted with fashionable clothes. I have no complain about the recording technique and designing of filming locations either.
In the other hand, my thought on screen play is different. I find most film stories meaningless and is not worth attending. Itâ?Ts so rediculous every time I watch films which engaged in common stories such as beautiful girls who love handsome boys, then they run into serious or non-serious trouble which arised from both families or in their society, but they overcome their obstacles in life and finally married each other and live happily ever after.
Last, I have to consider myself a cinema skeptic but I feel very confident in my knowledge. Artistically, Korean serial films are incomparable to our Vietnamese serial films. Maybe I still have the Viet pride in my blood. I feel better and fully enjoy the artistic of our serial films more than the Korea ones.
Is there anyone who want to oppose me?
(It's still clumsy.)

.... they get married to each other ...
>>> you should omit 'get', only 'they married' is fine
Is there anyone who want to oppose me ??
>>> ... who WANTS
... There is a ridiculous thing about Korean serial movies ...
>>> too long ! you should shorten it
first thing to say :
forget about this writing 'cause it contains several mistakes; it's better for you (theWarrior) to write a new one without looking back at it.
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Sửa bài bác Thanh nhá, có sửa gì sai bác cũng đừng táng em nặng như táng bác Gấu.
Korean??~s serial films on our national television have recently become popular. Many of us are fascinated by these episodes (THESE EPISODES HAVE FASCINATED MANY OF US - active voice always sounds to me better than passive, just a personal pointa view) . Although I can??Tt stand watching these Korean films (THEM) for five minutes, their vast popularity has made me wonder (LED ME TO WONDERING: what values WOULD we FIND in those silly films? But FOR NOW let me put my personal Preferences aside, I want to discuss this phenomenon and most of its aspects in an art standard professional maner. (DON'T KNOW HOW TO CORRECT THIS BUT IT JUST DOESNT SOUND RIGHT. with a professonal manner and using standards of the art, maybe??
First, I find the technicalities (TECHINICALITY IS AN OK WORD, I'D PREFER USING "TECHNICAL EFFECTS")on those films are somewhat (SOMEWHAT DOESNT SOUND RIGHT, "QUITE" WOULD WORK) satisfactory. The directors DID good works (JOBS???) directing the creation of those films (WHEN YOU MENTION A DIRECTOR OF A FILM AND THAT HE DID A GOOD JOB, AUTOMATICALLY IT IS UNDERSTOOD THAT THE "GOOD JOB" IS ABOUT DIRECTING THE FILM. "DIRECTING THE CREATION OF THOSE FILMS ARE, THEREFORE, UNNECCESSARY AND INDEED MAKE THE SENTENCE SOUND AWKWARD.). They MADE good choices seclecting (AGAIN, DOESNT "CHOICE" IMPLY A PROCESS OF SELECTING SOMETHING???) pretty actresses, nice actors who WERE outfitted with fashionable clothes. I ALSO have no complainT about the recording technique and designing of filming locations (DESIGNING OF FILMING LOCATIONS? WHAT DO YOU MEAN? BTW, SHOULD BE "DESIGNATION" IN THIS CASE AT LEAST.)
ON the other hand, my thought (OPINION) on THE screen playS is different. I find most OF THE stories meaningless and is (WHY "IS" HERE???) not worth attending (WATCHING/SEEING). It??Ts so rIdiculous every time I watch films which engaged in common stories such as beautiful girls who love handsome boys, then they run into serious or non-serious trouble which arised from both families or in their society, but they overcome their obstacles in life and finally married each other and live happily ever after. (WELL, THIS DOESNT SOUND RIGHT EITHER. MY VERSION: Almost every film I have watched involves a same boring story of some beatiful girls falling for some handsome dudes; they all encouter troubles,which they always overcome finally, from both sides of the families or from the society and the ending is almost always perfectly happy.)
Last (FINALLY), I have to consider myself a cinema skeptic (HIC, DONT REALLY UNDERSTAND WHAT "A CINEMA SKEPTIC" IS. A PICKY VIEWER? IS THAT WHAT YOU MEAN???) but I feel very confident in my knowledge. Artistically (FROM AN ARTISTIC POINT OF VIEW), Korean serial films are incomparable (HEHEHE, INCOMPARABLE MEANS: "OUTSTANDING IN QUALITY." I'M PRETTY DAMN SURE THAT'S NOT WHAT YOU MEAN.)to our Vietnamese serial films. Maybe I still have the Viet pride in my blood. I feel better and fully enjoy the artistic of our serial films more than the Korea ones. (DAMN, CANT GO ON WITH THE WORK. I HATE SUCH BORING STUFFS. SORRY.)
Is there anyone who want to oppose me?
...WISEST IS HE WHO KNOWS HE DOESN'T KNOW...

I feel that we have to stay close with the author idea . I want to fix his wording but not his thought . Mr Longdatum, please write the whole essay that you think it's good so we can compare.

Posted by @Sil
~_~ Another silly idea from me (that probably won''''t be participated all too much)..but I was just thinking, writing topical essays or preparing for a debate actually do help your English alot. Something like "Critical Thinkers forum". So..yes..lets your opinions fly away and be imaginative.
Each fortnight (probably every odd week or so)..I will post up an essay topic, and every even week, will be a debate topic.
What do you think?
I''''ll start this week with the first debate topic. Anything you have to say on the matter, feel free to say, but be sure to be rational and logical.
Topic: Do you think abortion is wrong?
- Debate away!!
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With the desire to improve my English and to express my point of view. I attempt to write a topic which might contain many mistakes (mistake gì, phải nói là grammar mistake thì cụ thể hơn). Your assistance would be appreciated.
Nowadays, there are many people who are crazy about (đúng ra crazy at ?" có nghĩa là say mê) Korea''s serial films. Sometimes, I wondered (sao lại có quá khứ ở đây?) what is interesting (what is the interesting thing) about those movies. I myself can not stand it for even 5 minutes. Although (every) personal taste is different, we have to obey (dùng sai từ - nên là follow) the standards of art (nghe nặng quá, nói là pattern nghe dễ hơn) (?). There are many aspects to be considered when evaluating a movie.
First, technique which includes recording, designing and directoring (cả ba từ này đều không phải là từ chuyên môn ^_^), is perfect. The senses are very magnificent and the actors are very good looking and fashionable.
Secondly, I have to say it is absolutely a waste of time to watch those movies because they repeat the same story over and over (hình như bác cũng cho repeat quá nhiều rồi đấy, đã có repeat thì không cần dùng over and over nữa) . It is usually a love story between a pretty girl and a handsome boy, and then they experience (dùng từ này không ổn) some difficulties from their families or their (thừa their) friends. However, in (?oat the end? mới đúng) the end, after overcoming all the hardship, they get married to (married with chứ không phải to bác ơi) each other and live (đúng ra fải là lead a ?) a happy life. There is a ridiculous thing about Korean serial movies (lỗi dùng từ không thống nhất, Korea''s serial hay là Korean serial?) is (thừa động từ to be) that the main character often died (sao lại là quá khứ) at the end of the (dùng mạo từ ?oa? hơn là the) movies
Personally, I think that Vietnamese serial films are much more better than those Korean ones
Is there anyone who want to oppose me ? (thế bác có oppose những lỗi mà em đã sửa không)
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