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1/what have been the main agents socialization in ur life??describe how they affected u???
2/ why do most people conform?(do they?)
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4/describe some socially acceptable n non-acceptable forms of norm-breaking from ur country
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Được esu sửa chữa / chuyển vào 13:59 ngày 05/11/2004

Hi HB 787
Thanks for your correction. By the way, please tell me where should I take IELTS test? IDP or BC? Which centre offers better service.

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Tập chung nhiều bài essays hay để tham khảo:
http://www.hohuyen.com/forum/viewtopic.php?t=66

Gửi lúc 15:53, 05/11/04

Sorry CungTrang. I can''t answer your question about the testing locations since I am living in the US. There are many pages in this forum where you can find that information.
Good luck now.
Được hbae787 sửa chữa / chuyển vào 22:18 ngày 05/11/2004

Bạn này nhờ correct essay:


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Censorship on Television
Television is one of the greatest inventions in the world. Since television was invented, people have been able to get information easily and quickly. In ad***ion, people can learn many things from it. Furthermore, people can enjoy and relax with many programs on television. However, violence on television is a problem we have to try to stop. The content of television shows should be censored of violence because children are easily influenced by it, and it has had bad effects on people and society.The first reason that violence should be censored is because it influences children?Ts behavior. We, adult people, sometimes do not know what is right or wrong. Obviously, children cannot understand what they are doing. They just imitate what they see. Melzoff says that if children watch a toy being taken apart and put back together on television, they can imitate exactly 24 hours later (Hattemer 241). The fact that children can copy everything they see easily is a problem. There are many violent programs on cartoons, adventure shows, police shows. Truly, in Saturday morning cartoons there are more than 30 acts of violence per house featuring in many channels (Drevitch 13). Moreover, children do not understand the effects of violence, so they are influenced easily. The more they imitate, the more they might become ruthless and cruel when they get older. After researching, Leonard Eron and Rowell Huesman said that children watching large amounts of violent television when they were young easily fell into criminal behavior and serious crimes when they grew up (Hattemer 244-245). Leonard Eron and Rowell Huesman also indicate that people who watched much violence on television when they were children were likely to engage in criminal behavior at the age of thirty. They are also much more aggressive when they are drinking. They also punish their children more harshly (Hettemer 245).Another reason that violence should be censored is because it causes serious effects on society. Every day, society is suffering violence such as assault and homicide. Where is this violence from? It comes from violence on television. Brandon Centerwall points out that the rate of white homicide deaths has risen 93 percent in the United States and 92 percent in Canada since television was introduced to society. He also looked for every possible alternative explanation. However, he could find none (Hattemer 245). Another effect is that people become accustomed to violence. This is very dangerous because it can influence their thoughts, actions, and behaviors. For example, after watching violence, they might think that violence can be the way to solve problems. The more they are accustomed to violence, the more they become aggressive. Opponents of censoring violence on television programs believe that the harmfulness of each kind of violent picture is not exactly the same. Moreover, they said that showing violence in television might help people understand that violence is a moral mistake in society (Allman 50). This may be true; however, those opponent are not representative the whole society. In ad***ion, there are many ways to help people understand what a moral mistake is such as going to school, church or reading books. The violent scenes on television still influence children extremely. For instance, researchers found that when they show preschool children violent television, the children exhibit aggressive behavior on the play ground (Drevitch 13). Therefore, censorship on television should be considered strongly.In conclusion, violence on television can become violence in society. Moreover, violence is one of the worst things. It causes many bad effects in society. In order to prevent violence and to make the society better, the content of television shows should be censored of violence as soon as possible.
Works citedAllman, William F. ?oScience Looks at Television Violence.? U.S. News & Report 12 July. 1993: 50. Drevitch, Gary. ?oMurder She Saw? Scholastic Update 11 Feb. 1994: 12-13.Hattemer, Barbara. ?oCause and Violent Effect: Media and Our Youth? Our Times. Ed. Robert Atwan, Boston, Saint Martin?Ts Press: 1995: 241-9.

Gửi lúc 04:59, 16/11/04

Posted by: yngwie_toan
Censorship on Television
Television is one of the greatest inventions in the world. Since television was invented, people have been able to get information easily and quickly. In ad***ion, people can learn many things from it. Furthermore, people can enjoy and relax with many programs on television. However, violence on television is a problem we have to try to stop. The content of television shows should be censored of violence because children are easily influenced by it, and it has had bad effects on people and society.
The first reason that violence should be censored is because it influences childrenâ?Ts behavior. We, adult people, sometimes do not know what is right or wrong. Obviously, children cannot understand what they are doing. They just imitate what they see. Melzoff says that if children watch a toy being taken apart and put back together on television, they can imitate exactly 24 hours later (Hattemer 241). The fact that children can copy everything they see easily is a problem. There are many violent programs on cartoons, adventure shows, police shows. Truly, in Saturday morning cartoons there are more than 30 acts of violence per house featuring in many channels (Drevitch 13). Moreover, children do not understand the effects of violence, so they are influenced easily. The more they imitate, the more they might become ruthless and cruel when they get older. After researching, Leonard Eron and Rowell Huesman said that children watching large amounts of violent television when they were young easily fell into criminal behavior and serious crimes when they grew up (Hattemer 244-245). Leonard Eron and Rowell Huesman also indicate that people who watched much violence on television when they were children were likely to engage in criminal behavior at the age of thirty. They are also much more aggressive when they are drinking. They also punish their children more harshly (Hettemer 245).
Another reason that violence should be censored is because it causes serious effects on society. Every day, society is suffering violence such as assault and homicide. Where is this violence from? It comes from violence on television. Brandon Centerwall points out that the rate of white homicide deaths has risen 93 percent in the United States and 92 percent in Canada since television was introduced to society. He also looked for every possible alternative explanation. However, he could find none (Hattemer 245). Another effect is that people become accustomed to violence. This is very dangerous because it can influence their thoughts, actions, and behaviors. For example, after watching violence, they might think that violence can be the way to solve problems. The more they are accustomed to violence, the more they become aggressive.
Opponents of censoring violence on television programs believe that the harmfulness of each kind of violent picture is not exactly the same. Moreover, they said that showing violence in television might help people understand that violence is a moral mistake in society (Allman 50). This may be true; however, those opponent are not representative the whole society. In ad***ion, there are many ways to help people understand what a moral mistake is such as going to school, church or reading books. The violent scenes on television still influence children extremely. For instance, researchers found that when they show preschool children violent television, the children exhibit aggressive behavior on the play ground (Drevitch 13). Therefore, censorship on television should be considered strongly.
In conclusion, violence on television can become violence in society. Moreover, violence is one of the worst things. It causes many bad effects in society. In order to prevent violence and to make the society better, the content of television shows should be censored of violence as soon as possible.
Works cited
Allman, William F. â?oScience Looks at Television Violence.â? U.S. News & Report
12 July. 1993: 50.
Drevitch, Gary. â?oMurder She Sawâ? Scholastic Update 11 Feb. 1994: 12-13.
Hattemer, Barbara. â?oCause and Violent Effect: Media and Our Youthâ? Our Times.
Ed. Robert Atwan, Boston, Saint Martinâ?Ts Press: 1995: 241-9.

Hello yngwie_toan,
Here my revision for your essay.
Censorship on Television
Television is one of the greatest inventions in the world. Since television was invented, people have been able to get news and enttainment easily and quickly. In ad***ion, people can learn many things from it. Furthermore, people can get entertainment from many programs on television. However, television also provides audience with images of violence, and these violence content of television shows should be censored.
The first reason that violence should be censored is because it negatively influences children?Ts behavior. It is not easy for small children to know right from wrong. They just imitate whatever they see on TV. Melzoff says that if children watch a toy being taken apart and put back together on television, they can repeat this feat exactly 24 hours later (Hattemer 241). The fact that children can easily repeat almost everything they see is not only a gift, but also a problem. There are many violent programs on cartoons, action movies, and police shows. In a Saturday morning cartoons there are indeed more than 30 acts of violence per hour featuring in many channels (Drevitch 13). Violent acts on screen are created for entertainment purpose but children do not understand that. They are influenced by these in the wrong way easily. The more they imitate these actions, the more they can become aggressive and cruel as they get older. From their research, Leonard Eron and Rowell Huesman found that children watching large amounts of violent television at young ages easily establish criminal behavior and fall into serious crimes when becoming adults (Hattemer 244-245). Leonard Eron and Rowell Huesman also indicate that these children are likely to engage in criminal behavior before the age of thirty. They are also much more aggressive when consuming alcohol. They also tend to punish their children more harshly than normal (Hettemer 245).
Another reason that violence should be censored is because it causes serious effects on society. Every day, society is suffering from aggressive behaviors such as assaults and homicides. Where do these come from? In many cases they come from the murder and fighting scenes people see on television. Brandon Centerwall points out that the rate of white homicide deaths has risen 93 percent in the United States and 92 percent in Canada since television was introduced. He did look for every possible alternative explanation and could not find one (Hattemer 245). Another effect is that by watching violence on screen, people gradually become accustomed to it. This is very dangerous because this "violence tolerance" can influence their thoughts, actions, and behaviors. For example, people might think that violence can be an easy way to resolve problems. The more they are accustomed to violence, the more likely they may think it''''s normal to be aggressive.
Opponents of censoring violence on television programs believe that all violence pictures do not have exactly the same harmfulness. Moreover, they said that showing it in television might help people understand that violence is a moral mistake in society (Allman 50). This may be true; however, those opponents do not speak for the whole society. There are many other ways to help people understand what a moral mistake is, such as going to school, church or reading books. For children, the violent scenes on television can influence them profoundly in a negative way. Researchers found that when they show violent programs to preschool children, these children would later exhibit aggressive behavior on the playground (Drevitch 13). Therefore, censorship on television should be strongly recommended.
In conclusion, make-believe violence on television can become real violence in society. A peaceful society will be quickly wrecked by a number of killings, assaults, robberies, or rapes. In order to prevent violence thus making the society a better place to live, the content of television shows should be rid of violence acts.
Được hbae787 sửa chữa / chuyển vào 01:10 ngày 18/11/2004

nameste02 sent me a PM to ask for giving him a hand on wrtting essays. However, linhmoi think that it should be better to gather our community''s ideas and opinions.
01. the effective learning method in university nowadays
02. the most attractive job for young people
03. problem of overpopulation in VN
04. the neccessity of learning forein languages
05. why do young people in vn adict drug
06. should student do scientific research at unversity
07. suggest what to do to decrease the number of population in vn
08. what should young people do to contrubite their country
09. problem of drug addiction
10.Is university the only way for young people to archieve their ambitions
11.social prejudice to unmarried (or single) people
12.how to treat AIDS patients
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1. Some effective methods: self-study (in the library, at home),
studying
within groups of classmates (discussing, giving advice to each other),
studying together with practicing.
2. qualities for the most attractive job: well-paid, challenging and
lots of
chances for promotion.
3. some problems: poverty, less job opportunities for young people
4. learning foreign languages: have better job, communicate better,
widen
your knowledge easily (through Internet)
5. reasons for addicting drug: jobless, prove to be mature, gathering
with
bad friends
6. students should do because: they can practice what they have
learned,
they can express their knowledge, they can express their ideas (maybe
some
of their ideas are very useful)
7. to decrease the population: provide enough information to people,
provide
more jobs for young people
8. they should: study hard, improve themselves to be good people, take
part
in social activities.
9. problems: drug addicts may do bad things to earn money for buying
drugs,
drug addicts cannot study or work well, drug addiction may lead to AIDS
10. No, it''''''''s not the only way because: some people start their own
business
without studying in the universities, there are too many people
studying in
the university nowadays, more and more companies look for people who
can do
the job but not the ones who know a lot but cannot do anything
11. I don''''''''t understand this topic. I don''''''''t think the society has some
prejudice to single person.
12. How to treat AIDS patients: taking care of not only their injury
but
also their feeling, helping them to join the society, encouraging them
to
take part in social activities (helping other patients)
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give me the way to inprove these topics...i only thing fews main ideas
but i think there''''''''re wrong things...mayby you can help me fix them....n if you have a lot of time you can send to me some speech about these topics
thanks a lot..

Some ideas of mine about those essays (not all essays !) :
01. the effective learning method in university nowadays
Efficient methods should:
(1) Motivate students, by appealing to their curiosity, to goals they can reach by studying.
(2) Teach systematic skills. Avoid solving individual problems, teach general strategy to solve.
(3) Be as concrete as possible
(4) Give no defying tests
...
03. problem of overpopulation in VN
This problem leads to:
a. Ecological degradation, as more population uses more resources => Deforestation, pollution....
b. Poverty
...
04. the neccessity of learning forein languages
1. Better professional skills and opportunities
2. Open up your mind
3. Cultural exchange
07. suggest what to do to decrease the number of population in vn Let''s be precise: we CANNOT decrease population, we can only decrease population growth !!!! For that, we need:
1) Better living con***ions
2) Stop thinking like "Trời sinh voi sinh cỏ"
...
08. what should young people do to contrubite their country
Improve their own skills, capability, knowledge...
10.Is university the only way for young people to archieve their ambitions
Well it depends on the ambitions ...............................
12.how to treat AIDS patients
First thing: STOP arbitrary discriminations !!!!!
Help to integrate into society
Morally support AIDs patients
...

Bác hbae787, em post cái paper vào đây cho nó hợp với chủ đề. Bác cứ mạnh tay mà proofread! Căn bản là em hay procrastinate, viết xong là nộp luôn cho giáo, không bao giờ có thời gian check câu cú, diễn đạt, mà em nghĩ sao viết vậy, nên nó không được trau chuốt lắm! Còn về khoản bia bọt, bác cứ yên tâm, gì chứ Tiger với Heneiken ở chỗ em là loại bia rẻ tiền nhất!
Thanks in advance & Happy New Year to All!!!
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Mexican Immigrants in the U.S.
Immigration has become a global issue, as it touches both the hosting as well as the donor countries. Understandably, immigrants have played an important part in societies?T cultures and economy. Believed as the most powerful country in the world, the United States has received many immigrants from every corner, many of them are from Mexico. The Mexican American communities today are so big and influential that it has attracted attention from many anthropologists. On a macro level, this paper will discuss the anthropological views on Mexican immigration in America, particularly the roles of women, marriage, kinship, street-life gangs, then narrow down to a micro level--case studies of Mexican immigrants.
Anthropological views on immigration
In the late 1980s, an American anthropologist Elizabeth Briody conducted research on Household Labor Patterns among Mexican Americans in South Texas, and discovered the three prominent facets of Mexican immigration into the United States.

In the first place is the observation in the Southern part of America in general and Texas in particular. Sharing the borders with Mexico, states of California and Texas are densely immigrated by Mexicans, due to the common belief that America is a paradise. However, most of the Mexican immigrants are engaged in manual labor, which is not well-paid. Nearly sixty per cent of them have non-agriculture jobs such as ?oclerks in store, drivers, or delivery personnel, factory workers and permanent employees on large ?~ranchos?T (ranches/farms)? (Briody 1986 : 110), which is a consequence of the immigrants?T low-level education. Statistics showed that ?osixty-five per cent of the principle income earners had completed three years or less of schooling and eighty-nine percent had attended only elementary school (that is, grades 1-6)? (Briody 1986 : 111).
As Mexicans do not have to travel very far into American to find a job, the immigration process normally includes a transitional phase, in which ?oone household member comes to work in the U.S., while the other household members retain their residence in Mexico.? Unlike individual immigrants who need to earn money in a short time and return to their motherland, the transitional phase is mostly found in household cases, as these families, in an attempt to seeking a better life, have to settle down as well as have more obligations in the U.S.
It leads to the question whether one should be ?~alambre?T (undocumented) or ?~arreglado?T (documented). Many people find that the cost of living in Mexico is lower; therefore, they temporarily work in the U.S. and bring the money back to Mexico. Being ?~arreglado,?T therefore, never weighs in their minds. On the other hand, although family immigrants can illegal settle down in a new place, they most likely cope with an increasing number of difficulties such as daily needs, child care, education, and health?"to name a few. However, most immigrants as described in Briody?Ts book experienced time-consuming and exhausted transitional phases before they obtained visas for other family members, which is even harder after the event of September 11.
For instance, a Mexican woman named Maria worked as a maid in Texas, while her husband, who had only two years of schooling, was a street vendor. The mother crossed the border to home on weekends only, leaving the children in the care of the oldest child during the week. After twenty years of coming back and forth, the family decided to permanently live in the U.S. even if they were unable to obtain visas. In comparision with Maria, Ana?Ts family was a better-off, as they own land in Mexico to raise maize, beans and cotton. However, after her divorce, Ana had to work illegally on the vegetable fields in South Texas. Only ten years later she managed to drag her children to America.
Thirdly, the worker unit in the immigration to the U.S. has changed from single to multiple. Initially, ?othe household in Mexico relies primarily on the income of only on household earner?"that individual who immigrates? (Briody 1986 : 118); however, due to the greater job opportunities, urbanization and changes in American economy, virtually all Mexican immigrants, in an attempt *****rvive, have to seek for jobs. It should be noted that in Mexico women are not supposed to work to maintain their families. The ***ual division of labor, nonetheless, is modified when they come to America. The high number of immigrants together with more people, both men and women, participating in the labor market results in the fact that full-time employment becomes scarce. Some people fortunately having skills and a decent command of English are able to join the non-agricultural sector, in which they work as carpenters, janitors, delivers?.
The role of women, kindship, and gang identity among Mexican immigrants
As aforementioned in the third argument, husbands, either for or against, have to let their wives to work, otherwise they can hardly survive in America, which implies the more important role of women in an immigrant household, as tra***ionally they are also supposed to take care of their children. Although all of these elements are a burden on the women, they gradually become independent from their husbands. The woman mentioned in the second example, Ana, found her way *****rvive in South Texas, then bought a small house and finally brought her children to America. It must be a miracle, when knowing that Ana?Ts first job after divorce is working on daily basis on American landowners?T vegetable fields. ?oEach day, Ana would go to the international bridge and wait to be hired by a crew leader?. No Social Security numbers (and thus, no legal documents were required in those days since the workers were paid in cash? (Briody 1986 : 112).
There is a shift in Mexican families from extended into nuclear ones, when they move from Mexico to America. Tra***ionally, the extended family ties in Mexico are strong. The elder, especially the male ones, are well respected and thus have more authority. However, in many cases, the parents go to America to earn money, leaving their children to the grandparents. If they are able to do any legal immigration documentation, they will bring their children to the new lands, as the elder can hardly do strenuous manual jobs and tend to live in the places they have been familiar with. So the grandparents in most cases stay in Mexico and receive money from their abroad descendants. As a result, the Mexican immigrant households in America are mostly found as nuclear families. The more a Mexican family integrate in American cultures, the more likely it is a nuclear family.
People look for their identity when they join in a bigger society. To maker it clearer, when Mexican immigrants arrive in America, they begin wondering who they are, what makes them different from the native people, as they are exposed to social discrimination and culture conflicts which they never experience back in Mexico. Vigil in his book Barrio Gangs - Street Life and Identity in Southern California described how gang forms in Los Angeles and how black Americans and Mexican Americans become the gang members. Being minority in a new environment, immigrants tend to gather in their own terriority?"barrios, which, like a coin, has both good- and bad-sided effects. As the barrios become bigger when more immigrants come to America, they segregate themselves more from the hosting society. When the second generations of Mexican immigrants grow up, they are the ones who endure the most discrimination and feel lost in the society, where they think they belong to. Most of them identified themselves American rather than Mexican, as they ?ohold somewhat disparaging attitudes toward ?~chuntaros?T and ?~wetbacks?T? (Vigil 1988 : 42). However, they have hard time integrating with the white American friends at schools: ?o I did poorly in school because I couldn?Tt speak English. We used to segregate ourselves at school, because that?Ts what everybody did. This didn?Tt make me conscious of the injustice, because I took it as the order of things? (Vigil 1988 : 58). Other reasons that give rise to gang in barrios, according to Vigil, are economic hardship, and family stress (father abscent or parents?T divorce). The streetlife gang is also mark of self-identity, as the ?ogang members have adopted a distinctive street style of dress, speech, gestures, tattoos and garffiti? (Vigil 1988 : 2).
Braceros and mojados
Given the large number of Mexican Americans, such words as braceros or mojados (wetbacks) or borderjumpers become more popular. Braceros were Mexican laborer admitted to American under a seasonal job contract. The first batch of braceros was perhaps in 1940s, when they came to America to work as farm or railroad workers. Rigoberto Garcia Perez when talking about his father who went to Fresno from 1941 to the middle of 1942 explained the reasons why braceros came to America were both money and curiosity, a point of view which is much different from that of Mexican border crossers today. As a result, Perez?Ts father came back and forth between America and Mexico many times, but he still lived in Michoacan, Mexico for most of his life. Because either his father influenced him or the Mexican families tra***ionally respect the male elders, Perez did not settle down in America until his father?Ts death. He brought his wife from Mexico together with their daughter, forming a nuclear family in the U.S. He said:
When I fixed my immigration status. I decided I wouldn''t go back, because my father had died, and I decided to bring my wife here instead. I was tired of being alone. I thought, why am I leaving her there? I thought I''d bring her here. And then she didn''t want to go back either. So the two of us were here then.
and commented on his life as a bracero:
It was the beginning of the life I''m leading now. They were good experiences, as I explained, because we survived. Thanks to those experiences, we survived. I found a good boss, and here I am. I can''t ask for more. I have two countries, just me, one person. I can cross the border, and live happily in my land. And I can live happily in this country too. Because, with me, people have been marvellous. And now I have a brother-in-law in the White House. [Laughs]
However, not many Mexican immigrants have a happy ending in America like Perez. There are a large number of mojados, who live in Mexico but across a river daily to work in America. Depicted in Mojados (Wetbacks) by Santoli (1988) , Rosa Maria Urbina crossed the river five days each work to work as housekeeper in El Paso. She only met her children on weekend after taking them out of the orphanage. Rosa told that the male mojados prefer working in the fields, which is harder and not very steady. Unlike bracero, mojados have more to worry about the immigrant status, if they want to settle down in America. ?oOn the farms where I work, some people are legal and others aren?Tt. If you drive your own car, the police usually won?Tt question you. But if you come to work in the employer?Ts bus, they?Tll take you away,? she said.
Even if they have to confront many difficulties, America is seemingly a paradise where they all want to go to. ?oIf they [immigration officers] catch me again and send me back to Juarez, I will just come back across the river,? said Rosa when being asked about the migration problems.
It is not until the first batch of braceros came to America that Mexicans immigrated into this country. The immigration stream has started for a couple of centuries, which makes it easy to understand why the Mexican culture is so popular in America. Compared to other immigrants from Asian, and other Latin American countries, Mexican Americans now have more chance for upward social mobility, especially if their families have several generations living in America. However, there are always newcomers, who both legally and illegally try to move to America. The trend is irresistible, but what is important is how to help these people have a better living con***ions?"a task of both countries America and Mexico and non-governmental organizations.